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.you s p o k e too soon. by ~corpselover7:iconcorpselover7:



sometimes, you feel yourself being
                       ((trapped))
    behind walls that you’ve built for yourself.
and you
   just                                d
      keep
            r u n n i n g
      into                         n
   them.
you keep trying to fi
             the missing pieces of your
     fract/.ured         key
that will open the door to your
         ha       pp

          i         s.
              nes

the problem is, you lost the key before it even bro
             k
             e.
and sometimes you’ll find pieces
            until one day you’ll find one final piece
    and you’ll feel as if you’re floating on
            a             i             r.

BUT THE AIR IS POLLUTED AND SOMEHOW YOU FIGURE OUT
THAT THERE ISN’T ANY GLUE AND YOU NEED THE GLUE TO
COMPLETE THE KEY!

and then it all falls  a   p   a   r   t.

something that used to feel so ::right::
       now feels so incredibly x wrong x
and all the safety and comfort and happiness
                     you thought you felt is
                        g        o        n        e        .

it feels like there’s a       in your heart
                                  r  o
sharp and pointy       c  k      and it cuts you every second you live.
    
but you just keep telling yourself “i’ll get over it.”
              until one day you wake up and realise that
                        you’ll  n   e   v   e   r   be over it.

that’s how you can tell it’s l
                                                o            
                                                      v
                                                            e.
©2007-2009 ~corpselover7
:iconcorpselover7:

Author's Comments

Please do not think about what this could mean or should mean, just take it for what it is. And don't just read this and pretend to yourself that you won't think about it, read this and respect my opinion and take me seriously.

I got the idea for this format-type thing from Amanda, who got it from the chalkboard in Blank Page.

Advanced Critique Encouraged Heavily.

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:iconfatkat:
The ending takes Padfoots cake!

Miraculous!

I.
l
o
_ v
__ e

it.

--
~(||)

Bringin' Chivalry back, one good deed at a time...
* turin-the-forsaken

Think of all the beauty still left around you and be happy.
Anne Frank, Diary of a Young Girl, 1952
:iconcorpselover7:
Fanks! I'm very proud of it, and I've got a lot more stuff coming.

--
A thought, even a possibility, can shatter and transform us. -Friedrich Nietzsche

-Moony
:iconfatkat:
May I submit my line break poem as well?

I might suggest writing "rock" with the "ck" above... but I don't know anything....
Maybe below?

nyeh.

For disclaimer purposes: You should really submit that to Inkblot. The deadline's the 23rd of Feb(r)uary!

--
~(||)

Bringin' Chivalry back, one good deed at a time...
* turin-the-forsaken

Think of all the beauty still left around you and be happy.
Anne Frank, Diary of a Young Girl, 1952
:iconfatkat:
Hurray!

I would also like to submit my poetry for english...
Would you mind?

I still need to write something!

*slaps own wrists with ruler*

No computer! Bad! BAD!

--
~(||)

Bringin' Chivalry back, one good deed at a time...
* turin-the-forsaken

Think of all the beauty still left around you and be happy.
Anne Frank, Diary of a Young Girl, 1952
:iconcorpselover7:
Absolutely.

I originaly had the rock like r o
c k
but DA messed it up.

I certainly will! I've got tons to submit this year.

--
A thought, even a possibility, can shatter and transform us. -Friedrich Nietzsche

-Moony
:iconkattlyness:
It seems like a lot of the time dA likes to mess up formats, and I'm glad you got it to work so well for you.

Naturally, I like the poem as well, not just the technical aspects. My poetry is never really that poetic...
:iconfatkat:
Me too!
I hope that some of my submissions get in *crosses fingers*

--
~(||)

Bringin' Chivalry back, one good deed at a time...
* turin-the-forsaken

Think of all the beauty still left around you and be happy.
Anne Frank, Diary of a Young Girl, 1952
:iconcorpselover7:
Yeah. Thanks!

--
A thought, even a possibility, can shatter and transform us. -Friedrich Nietzsche

-Moony
:iconcorpselover7:
Yes yes. We shall have to pray. :pray:

--
A thought, even a possibility, can shatter and transform us. -Friedrich Nietzsche

-Moony

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